手机与道路安全演讲稿(插图)
上海嘉定区初三中考一模
英语作文深度解析（手机与道路安全演讲稿）
原题回顾:
VII. Writing (作文): (共 20 分)
You are going to give a speech at the School English Festival. The topic is “mobile phones and road safety”. You can refer to the pictures given for inspiration. Please write a speech for your fellow students. Your speech should be at least 60 words long.
你将在学校英语节上发表一次英语演讲，演讲的主题是“手机与道路安全”。请撰写一篇至少 60 个词的英语演讲稿。所给图片仅供参考。
（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。标点符号不占格）
解题思路:
这是上海初三英语的演讲稿写作题，核心要紧扣“手机与道路安全”主题，结合图片场景，遵循演讲稿格式和字数要求，具体思路分三步：
1.定结构，搭框架
演讲稿需符合“开头问候+主体论述+结尾呼吁”的逻辑，同时贴合题目要求的T(主题句)+E1(解释句)+E2(例证句)写作结构：
开头：用礼貌问候引出演讲主题（如 Today, I’d like to talk about mobile phones and road safety）。
主体：先说明手机在道路上的危害（E1），再结合图片场景举例子（如行人过马路看手机、骑电动车玩手机忽视行人，E2）。
结尾：发出安全倡议，升华主题。
2.结合图，找细节
图片呈现两个关键场景：
①行人在斑马线看手机，身旁有汽车；
②骑电动车的人玩手机，前方有老人过斑马线。
写作时需把这些画面转化为英文表述，体现“手机分散注意力，引发道路安全隐患”的核心，避免脱离图片空谈主题。
3.控字数，保规范
字数需≥60词，可通过补充细节（如 These behaviors may cause serious traffic accidents）、增加衔接词（如 but so after all）充实内容。
严格遵守题目要求：不出现考生姓名、校名，标点和语法准确，用词贴合初三英语考纲（如 zebra crossing electric bike traffic accidents 等核心词汇）。
范文欣赏
Dear fellow students,
Good morning/afternoon! Today, I’d like to talk about mobile phones and road safety with all of you.
Mobile phones are very useful in our daily life, but they can bring big dangers on the road. As we can see from the pictures, some people look at their phones while crossing the street, not noticing the cars around them. Others use phones when riding electric bikes, which makes it hard to react to sudden situations—like an old man crossing the zebra crossing. These behaviors may cause serious traffic accidents and hurt ourselves or others.
So let’s make a promise: put away our mobile phones when we are on the road. Let’s keep our eyes on the street and stay safe. After all, safety is the most important thing.
Thank you!
点评
（1）结构：逻辑清晰，贴合演讲稿格式
1.开篇：用Good morning/afternoon!的礼貌问候切入，再以Today, I’d like to talk about...直接点题，符合演讲稿“开门见山”的表达习惯，同时呼应了T（主题句）的写作要求。
2.主体：先通过but转折引出手机在道路上的危害（E1 解释句），再结合图片场景列举“行人过马路看手机”“骑电动车玩手机忽视老人”两个例子（E2 例证句），做到“观点+论据”的紧密结合，逻辑层次分明。
3.结尾：以So let’s make a promise发出呼吁，再用After all强调安全的重要性，升华主题的同时让演讲稿有完整的收尾。
（2）内容：紧扣主题，贴合图片细节
1.范文精准抓住图片核心场景：斑马线处行人看手机遇汽车、骑电动车者玩手机忽视过马路的老大，将画面转化为some people look at their phones while crossing the street others use phones when riding electric bikes等表述，避免脱离图片空谈“手机与道路安全”，做到内容与题目素材高度契合。
2.内容深度上，不仅指出手机带来的安全隐患，还提到cause serious traffic accidents and hurt ourselves or others的后果，让论述更有说服力，符合初三英语写作“言之有物”的评分要求。
演讲稿常用表达积累
词汇与短语
1.与演讲相关
speech n.演讲
quote n. & v.引用
presentation n.陈述；报告
report v.报告
topic n.话题
point n.观点，论点
2.关于倡议的目的及内容
in order to ... 为了……
let's ... 让我们……
be supposed to ... 应该……
for the purpose of ... 为……的目的
3.表示总结
in general 总的来说
in a word 总体来说
in sum 总之
to sum up 总之
4. 其他
aspect n.方面
opportunity n.机会
open our minds开阔思维
play online games玩线上游戏
the more ... the more ...越……越……
句子
开头句
1. I am going to be speaking about something that is very important to all of us.
今天我要演讲的内容对我们所有人都很重要。
2. It is a great honor for me to make a speech on ...
我很荣幸能就……进行演讲。
3. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to make a speech here.
感谢大家给我机会让我在此演讲。
4. The topic of my speech is ...
我演讲的主题是……
中间句
1. I will divide this topic into five main aspects.
我将分5个主要方面谈论这个主题。
2. We all ought to be aware of the following points.
我们都应该意识到以下几点内容。
3. The most important point to make is that we are old enough to help our parents do some housework.
最重要的一点是我们足够大了，可以帮助父母做一些家务。
4. Another aspect is that doing housework makes us relaxed and we will be happy for ourselves.
另一点是做家务会使我们放松，我们也会为自己感到高兴。
5. I would like to focus on the problem of ...
我想把重点集中在……问题上。
6. That's all I want to say about ...
关于……我就讲这些。
7. To sum up, helping our parents with some chores is our duty.
总之，帮助父母做家务是我们的责任。
8. It can not only open our minds, but also make us cleverer.
它不仅能开阔我们的思维，还能使我们变得更聪明、更快乐。
9. The more we read, the more we will learn, and the brighter our future will become.
我们读书越多，学的就越多，我们的将来就越光明。
10. However, some students spend much time in listening to music, watching TV or online games.
然而，一些同学花费了很多时间听音乐、看电视或者玩在线游戏。
结尾句
1. I hope I have made myself understood. Thank you for your listening.
希望我所说得大家都听明白了。感谢大家的聆听。
2. I hope this can give you some idea of ...
关于……，我希望这能给大家一个清晰的思路。
3. Thank you from the bottom of my heart for giving me this chance to speak to you today.
我从心底感谢你们今天给了我这个机会在你们面前讲话。
4. Let's start reading now. And let it become a part of our life!
让我们现在开始读书吧。让读书成为我们生活的一部分！
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