英语作文:做中国结送给外国朋友:
Dear Frank,
Hearing that you are leaving China, Iwant to present you with the Chinese knot(中国结) made by myself. The Chinese knot ispassed down through generations and is still glittering inour hands. It is completely in red which symbolizes thesuccess in different aspects in your life. Also, the Chinese knot represents peace and happiness, which can make youfeel peaceful and safe. Speaking of the reasons, as an intricateChinese art craft, it can be hung everywhere adding asense of China’s charm to your space. Besides, it will remindsyou of the time we spent together.
Hope you like it and have a safe journey.
Best regards,
Li Lei
名师点评:
这篇文章整体上完成了题目的要求,表达了对Frank的祝福和对礼物(中国结)的介绍,优缺点也非常典型。
优点:
结构清晰:开头明确表达了送别的主题,并介绍了礼物;中间部分详细描述了礼物的特色和选择理由;结尾表达了祝福和美好祝愿。
内容完整:礼物名称、特色和功能描述清楚。选择理由合理,强调了文化意义和个人情感。
语言表达:语言简洁明了,符合贺卡的风格。使用了一些具有文化内涵的词汇,如“success”、“peace”、“happiness”。
建议:
语言细节:
“It will reminds you”应改为“It will remind you”,保持主谓一致。同时,可以考虑使用更多描述性词汇,使文章更生动。
1)原文:It is completely in red.改为:It is a vibrant red, symbolizing joy and prosperity.
2)原文:The Chinese knot is passed down through generations.改为:The Chinese knot, intricately woven and passed down through generations, carries the essence of our rich heritage.
3)原文:The Chinese knot represents peace and happiness. 改为:It embodies peace and happiness, bringing a sense of peace and joy to your surroundings.
4)原文:It will reminds you of the time we spent together. 改为:May it remind you of our cherished moments and the laughter we shared.
文化背景:
进一步丰富关于“中国结”历史或文化背景的描述,以增加文化深度。例如:
历史背景方面:The Chinese knot, with its origins tracing back to ancient China, has been a symbol of unity and good fortune for over a thousand years.(中国结的起源可以追溯到古代,一千多年来一直是团结和好运的象征。)
文化传承方面:Traditionally handcrafted, these knots were used in ceremonies and as decorations, embodying the cultural heritage passed down through generations.(这些结是手工 古法制作的,古时用于仪式和装饰,体现了我国代代相传的文化遗产。)
情感表达:
加入更多个人感受或回忆,增强情感的表达。
(1)个人感受层面:
Every time I crafted a knot, I thought of our shared laughter and the unforgettable moments we spent together. (每当我编一个中国结,我就会想起我们共同的笑声和我们一起度过的那些难忘的时刻。)
(2)回忆层面:
This knot not only represents my best wishes but also holds the memories of our adventures and conversations during your stay. (这个结不仅代表着我最美好的祝愿,还承载着您在这段时间经历的冒险和对话。)
佳句积累:
1. It can be a bridge between our cultures and a reminder of our friendship.
它可以成为我们文化之间的桥梁,提醒我们的友谊。
2. This tea set is crafted with exquisite craftsmanship, featuring a delicate design of bamboo and chrysanthemums, symbols of resilience and nobility in Chinese culture.
这套茶具工艺精湛,以竹子和菊花的精致设计为特色,象征着中国文化中的坚韧和高贵。
3. It will serve as a reminder of our time together and inspire you to explore and appreciate the beauty of Chinese traditions.
它将提醒我们一起度过的时光,并激励您探索和欣赏中国传统的美丽。
4. May our friendship continue to flourish like the tea leaves that unfold in the hot water, releasing their full fragrance.
愿我们的友谊像茶叶一样在热水中绽放,散发出浓郁的香气。
词块积累:
1. 见证我们的友谊 a reminder of our friendship
2. 工艺精湛 exquisite craftsmanship
3. 坚韧与高贵 resilience and nobility
4. 散发出浓郁的香 releasing their full fragrance
5. 精致的设计 a delicate design
6. 欣赏中国传统之美 appreciate the beauty ofChinese traditions