一篇关于网上购物优缺点的英语作文
Recently,there is a heat debate about on-line shopping is good or not. Everyone has his own idea. For me, I would love to buying things from internet.
There are lots of advantages of on-line shopping. Firstly,you can enjoy the convenience of on-line shopping:surf the internet and order your things easily.Secondly,you can search as much information as you can which normal couldn't do. What's more, lots of people love to pursue the fashion and then they choose on-line shopping.But there is another voice:"The virtual is dishonest,it is not safe to do business through the internet." From LiuxuePaper.com.
In my view, on-line shopping's advantage outweights its disadvantage.With the development of network technology and human moral,our trade through the internet will be more safe.
英语作文 网上购物范文二：
LiuxuePaper Guided writing: 目前，有许多人在网上购物。请就这一现象， 谈谈你的看法。
In current society, shopping on the Interent is becoming more and more popular. It has many advantages and disadvartages .
Advantages: shopping on the Internet is convient and faster for customers. They can stay at home looking for the items, they need or like through the Internet which supplies a variety of products.
People needn't to go shopping in stores . Then it can reduce cars' amount on the road. So it also can reduce pollution of the gas. It's unpollution and reduce energy.
Disadavantages:customers can buy false production. People will be demaged and have many bussniss also demaged .
So we shopping on the Internet shouid notice the production. And we should avoid the false production on the Internet .
批 改 老 师：sarahlee
评分：92分
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作文地带编辑批改：
shopping on the Internet is convient and faster for customers 这句话中 convient 应该是convenient，faster 直接为fast 就可以啦，句中没有出现比较级形式，或者改为：shopping on the Internet is more convenient and faster for customers . and 前后的形式要一样啦。 ,
they need or like through the Internet which supplies a variety of products .这句话是汉语化思维啊.建议改为:they can search for anything that is helpful to them through the network .
People needn't to go shopping in stores.应该是People needn't go shopping in stores.既然在need后加否定副词not 说明把need看成是情态动词啦.那就不应该在后面加to 而是直接跟动词原形。若是把need看成实义动词，那应该是： People don`t need to go shopping.
So it also can reduce pollution of the gas. also 应该放在 can之后呢。当然在口语中是没有多大问题的。
It's unpollution and reduce energy 中, unpollution是错误的拼写哦.
建议改成: It is no pollution and it reduces energy consumption.
Disadavantages :应该是Disadvantages 小作者可能是编辑错误呢。而且此处也可以另起一段啊。形成分明的层次啊。
People will be demaged and have many bussniss also demaged此句话有歧义呢,建议改成: People's lives will be affected, and many businesses have been destroyed.[page]分页标题[/page]
So we shopping on the Internet shouid notice the production . And we should avoid the false production on the Internet .
最后一段两句话的意思是重复的, 建议改成:So we should choose the appropriate products that is helpful for our lives.而且一个小细节shouid编辑错误呢。
作文地带参考例句(文)
We should learn to judge the authenticity of the goods.
I think that online shopping is not necessarily safe.
点 评：
本文是借当今流行的网络购物为主题展开论述, 层次清楚的介绍了网络购物的优缺点, 在最后也表明了自已的观点,整体来说,是一篇完整的习作.
本文语言通俗易懂，观点鲜明，只是在个别词语上运用不当，反面事例可适当拓宽论述，建议小作者今后多多练笔，一定会有进步的。
给 分 理 由：
本文有三处语意不明，故扣3分，拼写错误两处，扣1分，编辑错误扣1分，语法错误多处，扣3分，故最后得92分。
批改满意度：
90%
