The Importance of Music（音乐的重要性）
Music is very important in our life. First, music can help us relax. After a long day of school, listening to soft music makes me forget all my tiredness. Second, music helps me study better. Sometimes I listen to light music when I do my homework. It makes me focus more. Third, music brings people together. At my birthday party, my friends and I sing songs together. We laugh and have a good time. Without music, our life would be boring. I think everyone needs music.
音乐在我们的生活中非常重要。首先，音乐能帮我们放松。在漫长的上学日后，听轻柔的音乐能让我忘记所有疲惫。其次，音乐能帮我更好地学习。有时候我写作业时会听轻音乐，它能让我更专注。最后，音乐能让人们团结在一起。在我的生日派对上，我和朋友们一起唱歌，我们笑着，玩得很开心。没有音乐，我们的生活就会很无聊。我觉得每个人都需要音乐。
写作亮点：用 “First, Second, Third” 分点讲音乐的作用，逻辑清晰，还举了生日派对的例子，很真实。
